求英文高手 ( jupas )

jacky1434

呢篇野係jupas OLE果300words
唔知文法果d有冇錯到
今晚係deadline
如下

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In the past six years student career, I met different thing and also learned a lot of things.

I will use a leisure time painting. Painting can train me to maturity, and forget annoyance. I don't have fixed method to painting, so sometimes I use a pencil to feel free to draw, this can help me to get inspiration. Painting to develop my idea, send my message to everyone, let them understand me.

In addition to the activity of static state, I still have a dynamic state of one side, I also like to play basketball with friend.I enjoy cross a player to get points, and pass ball to the teammate. Play basketball to make me learn team spirit, the main factor winning is help of the teammate, if the group can not cooperate, finally will cause failure.

My favorite subject is a history. I think history is important, because if there are no trying of predecessors, then can not be further now. Through analyze the event of failure, we can avoid repeating the same mistake and improve.

I once participated in a school sports day for many times. I will examine and improve at after games, I change to taking part in 200 meters game at From six. After an effort, I finally gained the third place in the preliminary contest and enter to finals. In the games, I learned to never give up of athletics spirit. I even if was slower than other contestant, but I never stopped a step to give up a game.

I appreciate my teacher and friend, their accompany me spend happy and sad, they will encourage at my disappointed of time. My motto is "There the is no such thing as redemption. Only penance for oneself". I will remind myself with the motto and make me solve a difficult problem.
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十萬個THX

乂含你爸條J乂

第一句已經....
In the past six years student career, I met different thingS and also learned a lot of things.
學生不是職業
多口一句I met different thing好港式A"A
好少聽得鬼佬咁講  改改佢

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jacky1434 發表於 12-1-11 11:11 PM
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認真架

乂含你爸條J乂

jacky1434 發表於 12-1-11 11:11 PM
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in the last six years of student life, i have experienced many things and gained the basic knowledge as the foundation of the higher eduction.

我都唔知呀  呢句你覺得OK既話 可以用黎頂住先

乂含你爸條J乂

education打少左個A

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乂含你爸條J乂

jacky1434 發表於 12-1-11 11:25 PM
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我幫唔到你咁多A"A 因為我聽日就有考試

不過你最好就搵人搞搞佢

第一段差唔多句句都有野錯

幸福烙印

In the past six years student life, I met different things. They made me gain a lot as well.

I use leisure time for painting. Painting changed me to maturity. It help me to forget any annoyance. I don't have fixed method for painting. Thus, I use a pencil draw sometimes in order to feel free, it helps me to get inspiration. Painting develops my idea and indicates my messages to everyone.

Apart from static activity, I do thing dynamic sometimes. I like playing basketball with   my friends. I enjoy crossing a player to get points. I feel delighted to pass ball to the teammates. Playing basketball helps me learn team spirit. The main factor of winning is the help of teammates. If the team can not cooperate well, it will cause failure.

My favorite subject is history. If there had had no any effort of predecessors, it would not have had today and future. Through analyzing the failure of the past, I can avoid repeating the same mistakes and get improved.

I have participated in ‘School Sport’s Day’ for many times. I get improved after the games. I have taken part in 200 meters game at From six. After I had spared no effort, I finally gained the third place in the preliminary contest and entered to finals. In the games, I appreciated the importance of athletics’ spirit and ‘Never Give Up’. Even if I was slower than other contestants, I didn’t stop a step to give up a game.

I appreciate my teachers and friends. Whenever I am happy or sad, they accompany and encourage me. My motto is "There is no such thing as redemption. Only penance for oneself". I will remind myself with this motto on the coming days. I am sure it would be helpful for me to run through many difficulties.

幸福烙印

我好認真咁句句同你改架

〝Ex喵﹑

多過10個字睇唔明
你慢慢

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ko鳥

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間間學校Jupas deadline日期好似吾一樣

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