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My "correction" is just to rewrite the original in my style only, not to say that the original one is incorrect.

Also, what I aim to do is to simply the original one so that use less words to express the same idea, so that within the words limit you can write more.  Don't think that you write more will score higher.  Just imagine you are the examiner, do you want to mark a paper with extra words?

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wow 2 pages of english in this thread!
im glad you guys are practicing your english through talking about fez :P
Lets stick to topic of fez instead of talking about exam techniqes.
Although i have only been playing for 6 months, i am totally addicted to this game. The gameplay is fantastic; the idea of summons, pvp combined with real time strategy just makes me love this game.

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原帖由 奸雄_HuNg 於 10-5-6 04:32 PM 發表
見到D英文我自卑緊/口\

+1
係時候學下野

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2kf被ce騎劫

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我想講 d?u 玩野? 沙煲咁大個拳頭見過未

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原帖由 hydefaith213 於 10-5-6 06:06 PM 發表
wow 2 pages of english in this thread!
im glad you guys are practicing your english through talking about fez :P
Lets stick to topic of fez instead of talking about exam techniqes.
Although i have  ...

However,it is operated by such a piece of sheet ,
which has innovated the funking bean.
I cannot save points now and I need a hand.

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For an examination, i think your passage is quite good. But don't mistake me, i mean for examinations only. You know, this is simply just too formal for talking about an online game.

My version:
The coming of English CE, sparked me an simple idea on improving our standard of English, by creating a thread about FEZ in English.

I wonder if there are any superiors who are fluent in English can give us some advices or corrections
on our mistakes by viewing our posts.
Okay, let me start a topic first.

Should players under level 20 be allowed to join the frontline?

Personally, i think anyone should be allowed to join the game, regardless of their levels, abilities, equipments or whatsoever.

Why? Instead of giving you an answer, i ask you a question. Should people not be allowed to walk on the street simply because they are too young, too poor, or have disability?

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原帖由 stormfxx 於 10-5-6 06:21 PM 發表
For an examination, i think your passage is quite good. But don't mistake me, i mean for examinations only. You know, this is simply just too formal for talking about an online game.

My version:
T ...

LOL
unless they get killed haha

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原帖由 iii007hk 於 10-5-6 06:15 PM 發表

However,it is operated by such a piece of sheet ,
which has innovated the funking bean.
I cannot save points now and I need a hand.

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theres nothing i can do for you cuz i dont use funking bean.
maybe try phoning the company and scream at them. Maybe this will help

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原帖由 stormfxx 於 10-5-6 06:21 PM 發表
For an examination, i think your passage is quite good. But don't mistake me, i mean for examinations only. You know, this is simply just too formal for talking about an online game.

My version:
T ...

omg i love your signature! XD

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原帖由 stormfxx 於 10-5-6 06:21 PM 發表
For an examination, i think your passage is quite good. But don't mistake me, i mean for examinations only. You know, this is simply just too formal for talking about an online game.

My version:
T ...

Granted,it's perfect for the situation you provided.It's freedom.
However,what it really matters whether player under 20lv can join the frontline is not
as an easy condition as street but the damage.
Each died one can  damage  the whole group .
It is thirsty for us to reduce live in the frontline and,better equipment is preferred as well .
It's quite difficult for us to accept players under 39lv can have mature skills, not mention 20lv.

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原帖由 iii007hk 於 10-5-6 06:31 PM 發表

Granted,it's perfect for the situation you provided.It's freedom.
However,what it really matters whether player under 20lv can join the frontline is not
as an easy condition as street but the dama ...

If you die in the street, you will deal some damage to the earth, and eventually the earth explodes
lol everyone should have the right to enjoy fez.

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發表於 10-5-6 06:42 PM |只看該作者
In consideration of the coming English CE, the idea of creating a thread which allows us to chat about FEZ in English in order to raise our standard of English was spread in my mind yesterday.

你個subject去左邊
似係Dangling modifier問題

成篇野工工整整 應該符合HKEAA要求吧
個人認為修飾太多

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